Great premise—teenagers shipwrecked on a deserted island,
learning to survive together. To make it
juicier, two are popular and attractive and the other two are rather geeky and
unpopular. The premise is great and the
plot isn't bad.
Unfortunately, the writing needs polishing. We see more details than we need to,
especially about who is looking at whom with what expressions on their
faces. The sections are told from
different points of view, but not distinctly enough for me to always remember
whose point of view I'm supposed to be in.
I feel like I'm head-hopping a lot.
The most trying thing, however, is how Casey over-explains so much of the
dialogue and action. In writing, we talk
a lot about "showing" versus "telling." This book suffers from a case of telling after showing. Here's an example from the all-important
first line:
"'I can't believe you
roped us into this stupid cruise," Sarah said in a tone of voice that
clearly carried her frustration…"
Uh…the words themselves tell us how frustrated Sarah is. Telling us only weakens it. From the second page: "'Oh, please. Like being stuck out in the middle of the
ocean with you guys and those loser Buckley kids could ever possibly be
fun. Not in a million years, Mom. I'm not in the damn chess club, you
know.' The thought of being on a cruise
with the two Buckley nerds was too much." Great dialogue. It shows us Sarah's personality and her
feelings about the whole situation. Then
Casey ruins it by explaining. Taken
separately, these aren't so bad, but when there's one after another after
another, it gets tiring.
That said, I did enjoy the story. There was some good action, especially in the
life boat scene and the chase toward the end.
I also loved the interesting bits on the island about how they learned
to survive and make different things.
I'm also a sucker for stories where people who don't initially like each
other start learning to get along, work together, and even love each
other.
My rating: 2
If you want to give it a try, download Wrecked here for your Kindle or other e-reader.
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